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BEFORE
Man, through the ages, has undergone lots of changes. From a period
when he hunted for his food to the present era where man is dependent on
preprocessed foods. During this period not only has man changed his mode
of eating but his whole lifestyle. In pursuit of more in this competitive
world man no longer has time. He is caught in a race against the clock. A
person who finishes more in lesser time is considered more efficient. This
has affected his eating habits as well. Man no longer has time to cook
food. Early mans only objective was to seek food to sustain them. Now days
it has taken a back seat.
Food no longer is of that importance. This is not an encouraging trend.
People are dependent on preprocessed or precooked food. It no longer has
the freshness it had. Such foods loose their mineral and vitamin content
and are not as healthy as fresh food. That’s why the number of diseases
are also rising. People have also shifted to high calorie content food
like French fries, pizzas, and ice creams etc. that is causing obesity,
weariness etc. Cooking is an art which his dying out. People enjoyed
cooking . It was a means of elevating all the stress and tension. They
could relax during this time and take control of their life. As man is
becoming busy and too involved in his busy schedule he has no time even to
take care of his own personal needs.
People may tend to argue that by using precooked and preprocessed food
they are efficiently using time and can use this precious time saved for
other purpose. But is it really worth it? This is a question whose answer
can invite lots of speculation as by saving this little time we are
inviting lots of other problems, which could easily be avoided. It is not
actually making our life simpler but more complicated. More the
sophistication in ones lifestyle more is the complication. Moreover
precooked food lacks the taste of freshly prepared food. Any day food
prepared freshly tastes better that precooked food.Now days almost every
thing is available in packets. Cooking has become a ritual. It is
something, which almost every one avoids. If this trend continues then
slowly the art of cooking will disappear and man will become totally
dependent on packeted and precooked food, which is not only bad for health
but also tasteless.
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AFTER
Man, through the ages, has undergone many
changes, from a period when he hunted for his food to the present era when
man is dependent on preprocessed foods. During this period not only has
man changed his mode of eating but his whole lifestyle as well. In pursuit
of more in this competitive world, man no longer has time as he once had.
He is caught in a race against the clock. A person who finishes more in
lesser time is considered more efficient. This pressure to do more in less
time has affected his eating habits as well and, as a result, man no
longer has time to cook food. Early man's only objective was to seek food
to sustain him and his family. Nowadays finding food has taken a back seat
to other priorities, such as career and education.
Food is no longer of that importance. This is not an encouraging trend.
People are too dependent on preprocessed or precooked food, which no
longer has the freshness it once had. Such foods loose their mineral and
vitamin content and are not as healthy as fresh food. That is why the
number of diseases is also rising. People have also shifted to high
calorie content food like French fries, pizzas, and ice cream, etc., which
is causing obesity, fatigue, etc. As man is becoming busy and too involved
in his busy schedule, he has no time even to take care of his own personal
needs.
Furthermore, cooking is an art which is dying out. People once enjoyed
cooking . It was a means of eliminating stress and tension. People were
once able to relax during this time and reflect on their lives.
People may tend to argue that by using precooked and preprocessed food
they are efficiently using time and can use this precious time saved for
other purposes. But is it really worth it? This is a question whose answer
can invite much speculation about whether by saving this little time we
are inviting lots of other problems, which could easily be avoided. It is
actually making our lives not simpler but more complicated. We have lost
many of the simpler things in our lives, like the simple acts of selecting
our evening meal, preparing it, and enjoying it with our loved ones, and
we are worse off for it.
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